Date: 04/24/2012 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
Daniella, I enjoyed this very much. I thought you managed to convey a sense of anticipation and suspense that built with each chapter, which I really admire because it's something that I struggle with as a writer. However, there were a few things that threw me -- How did Jason get his wrist communicator back from the Spectrans? Why is there no mention of his injured arm after the rescue? Why doesn't Jason seem more fearful right before the hearing, given that before he was worried he'd be removed from the team? Other than these questions, though, I greatly enjoyed this piece.
Author's Response: Thank you jublke! Points to take into account for the next fic...I can't believe that I did not include the bit about taking back the wrist communicator - doh!
Date: 02/29/2012 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
I've read everything from the beginning to the end of Chapter 19, and the only time I put it down was when I had to go my storm shelter (doggone tornado warnings, anyway!) I'm eager to see what happens next. (Something tells me there's something else that will pop Jason in the nose...)
Author's Response: Hey EW, watch out for that tornado! I've promised that in a future fic, Jason will have a good time :)))))))
Date: 02/20/2012 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 19
Wow! Daniella, you had me sitting on the edge of my seat.
I loved Cronus coming in and speaking his mind. Almost made me like him.
Author's Response: I liked the "almost made me like him" :)))) What have you got against Cronus? :)))))
Date: 01/02/2012 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 18
The angst is rising. Another great installment, Daniella.
Author's Response: Hi Becky, thank you for your comments! I should make sure that any next fic I do on Jason is a light-hearted, fluffy one, to make up for this :)
Date: 11/29/2011 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 16
Oh, geez. From one fire intro another.
I'm hoping Jason won;t get kicked off the team or sentenced to prison.
Author's Response: Hi Becky, good to hear from you! Yes, Jason is usually getting into a lot of trouble in his fics :) Talking about Jason, when is the next Chapter of "A man like me" being uploaded?
Date: 09/29/2011 4:29 PM Title: Chapter 12
This is fun and well-written (especially so since I think your first language isn't English?). I like that your characters are started to doubt one another and that the evidence entirely plausibly points to Jason.No snap judgements and random swings in character here, which is great.
But I am struggling with the very short chapters. I've just barely got back into the story and it's over, and there's another request to review. You're asking for reviews every 500 words. I find that's simply not long enough to form an opinion.
I promise you a full review when the story's finished...and I suspect this is why you're not getting many at the moment.
Author's Response: Hi cathrl! Thank you for the comments! You're right about the short chapters, I'm trying to change it, hence the longer gaps between updates :)
Date: 09/19/2011 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 9
Very interesting! I like the exploration of Jason's motivations. The way he is denigrated in canon for speaking his mind might easily lead to thoughts of defection by Anderson. But in this case, I suspect the Chief is up to something more. I am looking forward to seeing how this all plays out!
Author's Response: Thanks TJ!!!!!! I don't know if Anderson has something in mind, but I do :)