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Gatchaman Fiction Archive :: Transmute!
Reviews For Keeping Secrets
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Reviewer: jublke Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/19/2013 11:21 AM Title: Chapter 1

Hi Lyssa - Nice start. You captured the characters quite well and I appreciated your attention to detail. I found some of the descriptions a bit wordy, but I liked the dialogue. Keep writing, I look forward to more!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  It's always nice to see someone be truthful about the way they see a fic and I really appreciate constructive criticism.  I know what you mean.  However, if you think this chapter is wordy, I don't think you're going to like start of the next.  But please stay with it because the dialogue gets better in chapter three. I've written five so far.

 

Regards

 

Lyssa



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  It's always nice to see someone be truthful about the way they see a fic and I really appreciate constructive criticism.  I know what you mean.  However, if you think this chapter is wordy, I don't think you're going to like start of the next.  But please stay with it because the dialogue gets better in chapter three. I've written five so far.

 

Regards

 

Lyssa

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