Date: 12/08/2013 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 2
It's good to deal with a rescue team having to take so many lives. Maybe they shouldn't have been so eager to volunteer. ;)
Since I know you want real feedback, I thought the Thunderbirds were kinda rude in ch 1. The Chief really should have given them time to get to know and believe that G-Force has a clue about what they're doing before sending them near the field in a way that ultimately distracted the team. They could have observed from monitors on base without being in the way.
Author's Response: I agree - the reason why will come out in the next chapter ;-)
Date: 12/07/2013 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow lyssa! It just gets better and better. I love how you are delving into the psyche of the characters. Especially mark. It takes a good commander to swallow your ego and do what is best to get the job done! I like that you touched on how hard the thunderbirds might take killing the enemy for the first time. It brings depth to the story. As usual, you leave me wanting more! (:
Author's Response: More coming soon - but the stories in this universe won't come out one after another. I have a tendency to skip between stories. As always, thanks for your reviews