Date: 01/23/2011 12:14 PM Title: Worker Ants
Ghost, I'm not sure how I missed this.
You've always had a wonderful writing style and this is another fine example of it. The reader can feel the newbie's anxiety and confusion a they get used to everything.
I really enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Thank you, Becky. You're too kind. :) The BotP universe is a rather incomprehensible place, isn't it? I don't think I'd like to go there for my holidays.
Date: 05/22/2007 2:19 PM Title: Worker Ants
Ooooooh, another story about the hidden support personnel around G-Force! Neato! At first the beginning of the story reminded me of those old “choose your own adventure” stories, but I quickly moved past that. ;D I was kinda worried this was going to start dragging, but it quickly picked up pace with the ‘coffee’ incident. Yep, people are very particular about their coffee. I like how that was used in more than one spot, as well, giving the story continuity. I also love the Andersons response to the name of their new nemesis! Hah!
Re: Zark – When you jumped from the advice to suddenly after the visit, I thought I was going to get gypped of what would surely be a memorable visit to Nerve Center. I should have known better. ;D When you think of it, a neurotic robot with that much power having a bright yellow pet dog that likes to carry around a wrench WOULD be attention-getting. Something the mind would have to chew on for a bit before accepting that, yes, you did indeed see what you saw. Note: Have you considered listing this story as an answer to the “Rewrite a silly episode” challenge? It is a rather silly episode in some ways, and this was a great reworking of the episode through different eyes. Looking at the challenge, it looks like it would apply.
Author's Response: Thanks, Julie. The whole second person thing was an experience, and I basically did it just to see what it was like. Thanks for the heads-up on the 'silly episode' challenge. I have a couple of responses to that one, now.