Date: 06/04/2007 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh man, truly horrifying. One classic Mary-Sue trait after another in quick succession. Glad I didn't eat just before reading. :D
Only things I can think of to make it worse would have been the perfect singing voice (although the recorder part showed the perfect music talent) and being Ken and Jun kid from the future (although being Nambu's kid is bad enough). I would say this was a rousing success as a response to a Mary-Sue challenge!
Author's Response: Thanks, Juliann. That was a fun one to write. And she's actually Ken and Jun's grandkid. Nambu is their time-traveling kid.