Reviews For Springtime in Utoland
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Reviewer: cyscoe Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 05/09/2008 11:35 AM Title: Chapter 1

While there were a few things here that were predictable, you shocked me with some pleasant twists.  The choice to use Gatch rather than BotP was a good one as well.  Please keep writing for us!

Author's Response: Thanks!  I'm much more comfortable using Gatch, as I've watched all the episodes recently.  BOTP is more of a distant, fuzzy memory for me.  I will keep writing!

Reviewer: evangelina Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/23/2008 12:29 AM Title: Chapter 1

Oh, MAN.  The part where he says "I am Joe" just killed me. (In a poignant and wonderfully angst-ridden way.)

It blows me away that you're new to writing fanfic -- you're so darn good!

Great job, am looking forward to more from you!

Author's Response: I'm blushing...  There will be more from me.  I've discovered that writing fics can be tedious and frustrating, but it's also satisfyingly creative and even fun, and I am hooked on it now.

Reviewer: TransmuteJun Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/12/2008 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 2

Oh... this is so sweet! I always have a difficult time creating beliveable women for the guys (who aren't the Swan ;-) but you have done a terrific job with it! Of course, the ending was set... we all know how Joe's love life always turns out, and she was even working for Galactor!

I like the plot about the indestructible metal, and that's something they talksed about in the show occasionally as well, which makes it even more believable. This was intriguing and kept my attention, even with the sad ending I knew had to come.

This was great! 

Author's Response: You are too kind!  I was nervous about Cate -one lives in fear of creating a dreaded Mary Sue.  I mean, she's young, pretty and she gets in bed with Joe -if that isn't me projecting my desired self onto an OC, then I don't know what is.  Well, I'll pass on the whole dying part... I tried to keep her believable, even a tad unlikeable.  I'm so glad you think it worked.

Reviewer: Ebonyswanne Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/12/2008 5:14 AM Title: Chapter 2

Poor Joe! he aways gets the worst with women doesn't he.

I liked your story very much, and I liked how you showed the way Jun can connect with them when she realizes a team member is hurting. It would be Jun to kick him up the butt and tell him to get the beach...mmm the Condor in board shorts, now that is one for the imagination!!!! 

Author's Response: Thank you!  With Jun, I was thinking of that scene in Gatchaman ep. 98 where Joe is sitting on a grassy hill behind Nambu's house, miserable, and Jun comes out and tries to talk to him, without success.  In my version, he's downed some scotch and she's already twigged to what's happened, so it goes a little better.  I'm in awe of the sheer scope of your stories, Ebonyswanne -to me, 13000 words felt really long!

Reviewer: petra Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/11/2008 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 2

I liked it... a lot! Poor Joe. He always gets it doesn't he. I liked the ending, the whole wrap-up.

Don't worry, you're not too old, because if you were, then I'd be too old too and I'm not :)

Write more!

Author's Response: Thanks, Petra!  My initial idea was to write another doomed love interest for Joe, but to give them a little more time to get to know one another.  I can't resist Joe, but I especially can't resist suffering Joe.  I know, I have problems...  But, if I recall, your fic has a similar theme -I'm not alone!

Reviewer: Springie Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/07/2008 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 2

WOW....that was really good! Your dialogue was fantastic...I especially enjoyed the conversation between Jun and Joe...very sweet connection you gave them! I certainly hope you will do more writing in the future!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  Your encouragement means a lot to me.  Dialogue is easier for me; figuring out what to write when no one is speaking -that's much harder.  I will tackle something new as soon as I get a coherent idea together.  I've discovered that I can't begin a story unless I know the ending.  I don't have to know exactly how I'm going to get there, but I have to know what it is.

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