Date: 05/20/2010 3:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
Darn, everybody's already said most of the good stuff...;p
Susan being a Galactor (you did say Galactor) plant was a very interesting twist.
I like your 'nameless' tech character and how Jason sees her at the end. And I think Jason owes her a dinner date for helping him.
Maybe the next Zark won't be so darn gullible? *rolls eyes*
Very well written, excellent work.
Date: 03/22/2008 7:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh yes...the diabolical Zark...I love this one, Eva! Showing the story through the "invisible" tech is really interesting. It is great that Zark gets what is coming to him in this one, and that Jason will now be paying more attention to the "little people"...I hope the tech gets more attention form him now!
Date: 03/06/2008 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
Ah yes, the demented 7-Zark-7, with his psychotic view of life... bwaaaa haaaa haaaaa.... i loved the big reveal when it was shown that he was the true villain! The fic was interesting reading too, as I could picture myself in the 'heroine's place: being ignored by, yet drooling over, the Condor. Sigh... a fun read!
Date: 03/06/2008 12:27 AM Title: Chapter 5
Eva, I always find it a treat to read your fics. This one was so nicely written, with twists and turns, and from the point of view of one of the "invisible" people in the G-Force support team.
Of course, we all know that there is something slightly sinister about Zark.....
Date: 03/04/2008 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
Another Zark bites the dust! ;) We don't get very many fanfic with Zark in it, so it was fun to see you insert him into this, even if it was just to destroy him.Thank you for doing such a wonderful job on my story idea. You had a completely different take on the idea than I did originally, and as such really enjoyed reading your outlook. I think the combining of first and second person accounts in this really worked, and I really like how you started out the fanfic. The first line is great!I knew when I submitted this idea that the story could so easily turn into a Mary Sue story, and I think you did really well in avoiding that pitfall. The female character has her flaws, she didn't completely save the day. Instead she was a helper. I love fanfics that look at other aspects of the ‘universe’, to see things from other people’s eyes. So I really enjoyed the characters description of Mark when she entered Chief Andersons office for her interview.
The only thing that bugged me is the formatting, but I know that’s just a case of Efiction inserting 2 line spaces instead of one. Once that is taken care of, it would be a very comfortable read. :)