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Gatchaman Fiction Archive :: Cricket
Penname: Cricket [Contact] Real name: Cricket
Member Since: 05/14/2007
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Bio:
Also known as Sandy.

A long-time fan of Battle, I innocently typed it into Google in what may have been 2001. Lucked out and found some incredibly well-written fanfic -- hey, there's more to it than Mary Sues and R ratings! And, more importantly, it looked like fun.

I've been on all sides of the "fast / perfection" debate. I know the joy of working at something until it's exactly right, and the sorrow of watching the muses leave because you're too demanding. It boils down to doing what feels right at the time.

So, if you're moved to spend your time critiquing my work, do so. I know how fun it can be to take something apart to see what makes it work, and the challenge of figuring out why it doesn't quite work. Even if I don't use the advice immediately, I will appreciate the effort, and keep it in mind for the next piece. As I used to say, Any un-reported problems with this one will most likely inflict it upon you again.

If you're moved to comment in other ways, do that as well. The most important thing is that, whatever you do with my offerings, you enjoy them.

Cheers!
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Reviews by Cricket
Summary: What if Jason wrote poetry?
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Feathered Hearts
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Original Character, Princess
Genre: Angst, Character Study, Poetry
Story Warnings: Mild Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Mostly Canon
Word count: 1136 - Read Count: 1975 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/17/2007 - Published: 05/17/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 05/09/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I can see the teacher running to the counselors with that poem. "Jason's not telling us something!"

Author's Response: I just hope that she passes him this time.  She failed him during his first time through her class, so he's really making the effort so he's eligible for his high school diploma.  Not sure he'd cooperate otherwise.

- Rebuilding by jublke - Rated: 13+ - - starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 3]
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Summary: Jason is acting distant after his recent implant surgery.  Keyop is worried about him and decides to spy on his teammate.  But spying comes at a price: in order to keep Jason's trust, Keyop will have to keep Jason's secret.  Second in the Fall and Rise of the Condor series.  
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Fall and Rise of the Condor
Chapters: 3 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Keyop, Mark
Genre: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, Hurt/Comfort
Story Warnings: Mild Language
Timeframe: Sequel
Universe: Alternate Universe
Word count: 5945 - Read Count: 5806 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/17/2007 - Published: 05/17/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 04/04/2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Nice to see Jason realize what a tough position Keyop put himself in for his big brother. Also nice to see Jason realize he can't keep up the facade forever. Looking forward to the next in the series.

Author's Response: Thanks, Cricket.  I'm glad you are enjoying these.  :)

- Leaders Never Fail by jublke - Rated: Everyone - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
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Summary:

Set two years before G-Force's first mission, Spectra is just a bizarre theory postulated by Chief Anderson.  Mark is a "regular" teen trying to juggle the responsibilities of school with secretive training for a theoretical war with alien life.  Mark is bright and capable and used to taking care of himself.  So what happens when he starts to fail a subject at school?      


Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Feathered Hearts
Chapters: 3 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Mark, Original Character, Princess
Genre: Angst, Character Study, General
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Prequel
Universe: Tenuously Canon
Word count: 2303 - Read Count: 4805 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/18/2007 - Published: 05/18/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 05/09/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

The only leaders who never fail are the ones who have good seconds.

Author's Response: I'd like to think that Mark may have been misinterpreting the Chief's teachings.  On the other hand, I think the Chief would make a fairly imposing parental figure.

- Defiance by Katharine - Rated: 18+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 28]
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Summary: Jay makes his final stand as his cerebonic implants begin to fail and Gallactor launches a catastrophic offensive. 
Categories: Gatchaman, Battle of the Planets
Series: The Disturbediverse
Chapters: 16 - Table of Contents
Characters: Chief Anderson, Devil Star/Galaxy Girl, Dr. Kozaburou Nambu, Jason, Jinpei, Joe Asakura, Jun, Ken Washio, Keyop, Mark, Princess, Ryu Nakanishi, Tiny Harper
Genre: Character Study, Drama, Epic
Story Warnings: Explicit Material, Graphic Violence, Mature Content, Strong Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Alternate Universe
Word count: 107832 - Read Count: 44746 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 11/20/2012 - Published: 05/19/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 06/06/2011 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 5.10

Nice tight, tense writing. It drew me in again, despite the time since the last installment. Come on, Jay, do something!

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Date: 12/06/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Running on Empty

Re-read the whole thing over the weekend. Very powerful. I'm sorry to see it end, but glad it's over for them.

Summary: If you're going to do it,...
Categories: Gatchaman
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: None
Genre: Action/Adventure, Humor/Comedy, Parody, Self-Insertion, Tragedy
Story Warnings: Mature Content
Timeframe: Other
Universe: Tenuously Canon
Word count: 1327 - Read Count: 2629 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/29/2007 - Published: 05/29/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 06/05/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thanks! I enjoyed writing this one as much as others are enjoying reading it.

Summary: Someone is in a coma, but very much aware. An experiment in writing the same story in two universes.
Categories: Gatchaman, Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 2 - Table of Contents
Characters: None
Genre: Angst, Character Study, Tragedy
Story Warnings: Death
Timeframe: Other
Universe: Mostly Canon
Word count: 2231 - Read Count: 3274 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/29/2007 - Published: 05/29/2007
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Date: 06/05/2007 Title: Chapter 1: Occupational Hazards -- Gatchaman Version

Congrats to Julieann! When this went out in Bird Scramble, "Who was it?" was the most common question. So either I got it right before posting here, or we're on the same wavelength.

So far, Gatch is ahead in the preferences, so it's nice to see a vote for BOTP. I think folks prefer BOTP kept lighter.

As for "He's taking it the worst," definitely a successful experiment; I know it didn't work. I was trying for:

a) Comparing degree is useless. They're each taking it badly, but each in a different way.

b) He's still not fully conscious. He can focus on one at a time, but not on them all at once.

As for M/P, I see this moment as a step after what is shown in canon. He's no longer waffling over whether it will work or if he should try, he's decided, and now wants to put that decision into action. But, yeah, I do prefer them together. Comes of writing Gatch first.

Thanks for the comments!

Sandy

- Off the Page by jublke - Rated: Everyone - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 2]
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Summary: You know you've been writing too much fanfic when ... the characters start to talk back to you.
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason
Genre: Essay, Humor/Comedy, Self-Insertion
Story Warnings: Nose-Cola Warning
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Mostly Canon
Word count: 303 - Read Count: 1760 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 06/04/2007 - Published: 06/04/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 05/09/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

More people believe in Jason than in Julie, or in me. Scary thought. Then again, they're not writing fanfic about us. Meanwhile, better do as he says for now.

Author's Response: Cricket - Good point!  At least we don't have to do whatever anyone writes about us ... Yep, Jason's a fairly imposing character when he wants to be.  Writing fanfic, I've learned that if the characters just won't do a scene the way I want it, that probably means that I need to rewrite it.  This was the first time that I ever had that experience.

Summary: When G-Force underestimate the latest Spectran mecha, help comes from a quarter they hadn't anticipated... A crossover of Battle of the Planets with Thunderbirds.
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 21 - Table of Contents
Characters: Other Crossover Character
Genre: Action/Adventure
Story Warnings: Mild Adult Situations, Mild Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Alternate Universe, Cross-Over, Mostly Canon
Word count: 43679 - Read Count: 37375 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 07/30/2007 - Published: 06/22/2007
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 08/27/2007 Title: Chapter 21: Epilogue

Really enjoyed this, as did my husband (who in general just doesn't get the whole fanfic thing). These are the comments I was able to scribble while reading, so they're roughly in the same order as the story.

LOL Gordon's reaction to going on a flight with Scott.

Great voices. A bit more relaxed than TB canon, but I prefer your way.

Nice melding of the universes, including how your BOTP differs from canon. I didn't find the recaps boring, and hubby (who doesn't know your version) didn't find it hard to follow.

Picky detail: There are fairly accurate magnetic scans of most of the ocean, so the military knows what's normal and what's an enemy. Have been since WWII.

Good co-ordination and shop-talk between Gordon and Tiny; different teams, different training, but the same facts and capability to get things done when the SOP goes out the window. Shows just how good those guys are. Also good between Tiny and Jason. (But that's less remarkable; they do it all the time.)

I like how they end up rescuing each other. Just love watching skilled workers at work.

Bit of a concern with Tiny being too good to be true. He flies the brick, has the techies' respect, does normal medicine and emergency, aviation medicine, and knows tons about the implants, and now we see he also has the dive tables memorized? Reads on. Ah, I see. He's a smart guy who's used the tables a few times, is used to doing the best he can with limited resources, and is too out of it to remember there's help on the other end of the radio. So change that to *acting* like he's too good to be true, which in this situation would be right in character, and shows how badly he's thinking.

LOL Be grateful for Keyop's innocence in a space this small.

Poor Alan, having to give up his dreams about the Swan. Really brings home G-Force's ages.

Alan grinned broadly. "Perhaps it's time you stopped calling me 'kid'." LOL

Mark not recovering. Is this a hint of what's wrong with him?

Mutual respect between the teams and a bit of earned cockiness all around. Nice.

I like Jason's reaction to the stars of Australia.

Good work with the differences between being passenger and crew.

Nice give and take with the skills. When to stand your ground about it being better for you to do it, and when to stand back.

I like how Mark's disgusted with his flying, while Scott thinks it's awesome. (LOL on his combat advice!) Shows how different their skills and needs are.

Hauling up the Phoenix and watching the winch. Love how G-Force watches IR and is practically biting their nails, having to sit back and watch them work, and how they observe the little details that show that IR is taking it very seriously.

I enjoyed this one and look forward to the sequel.

Author's Response:

Thanks! Glad to hear that it works even for those not so familiar with my universe.

I guess those magnetic scans missed a bit...they are out in the middle of nowhere. That's my excuse, anyway :)

Tiny does do scuba diving canonically, so he should be familiar with how the tables work. But yes, the idea was that none of them are thinking at all clearly at that point. 

Not so much that Mark's disgusted with his flying and Scott thinks it's awesome, as that Mark's really having to concentrate to fly well and Scott's impressed by his skills given his age. They're both seriously good pilots. 

Now, that sequel... 

Summary:

Keyop enters a strange new world. Can he make it back to the Team or will he be lost forever in the Theta Region?

This story was written for the Jan/Feb 2008 Fanfiction Challenge. I was assigned Petra's story idea which was "Pick any character G1-5. He/she wakes up in his/her normal environment and everybody is gone. There's nobody there at all, it's like all people have vanished from the planet. This is the initial situation, you don't have to keep it up the entire story if you don't want to."


Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: 7-Zark-7/1-Rover-1/Susan, Chief Anderson, Jason, Keyop, Mark, Original Character, Phoenix/God Phoenix, Princess, Tiny Harper
Genre: Action/Adventure
Story Warnings: Mild Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Canon
Challenges: 2008 January Idea Swap Fanfic Challenge
Word count: 3237 - Read Count: 2854 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 02/15/2008 - Published: 02/15/2008
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 06/04/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

"Using a tone normally reserved for silencing incompetent junior officers." I don't remember the series showing her needing that tone, but I'm sure it happened off camera, and the junior officer would remember.

Looks like the wisps didn't do their homework. Telling Keyop that he is safe, when the team is missing? Stupid!

Little Big Planet owes you royalties. Your version is better. Do you think someone else could take my shift there for a few nights?

Nice work with the two different POVs for the previous victim.

Any chance of more in this series? It's got potential.

Author's Response: I've thought about doing a follow-up, but I haven't quite got a workable plot yet.  We'll see ...

Summary:

What if Mary Sue wrote BotP/Gatchaman fanfic?

(Warning:  If the title didn't already scare you away, please be advised that this piece should have an obnoxious humor warning!)  

 


Categories: Gatchaman, Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Mary Sue
Genre: Humor/Comedy
Story Warnings: Nose-Cola Warning
Timeframe: Other
Universe: Alternate Universe
Word count: 260 - Read Count: 1649 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 02/21/2008 - Published: 02/20/2008
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Date: 05/15/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Splutters.

Author's Response: This one is so obnoxious that I am always tempted to take it down.  :P

- Work Experience by cathrl - Rated: 13+ - - starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 7]
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Summary: Samantha Mitchell never meant to become a mechanic. Her work placement at ISO Racing was a mistake, pure and simple. But it was her mistake, one she wasn't about to admit to...and that meant sticking it out for two long weeks...
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 9 - Table of Contents
Characters: Mary Sue
Genre: General
Story Warnings: Mild Adult Situations, Mild Language, Mild Sexual References, Mild Violence
Timeframe: Other
Universe: Alternate Universe
Word count: 19047 - Read Count: 12707 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 05/24/2008 - Published: 05/24/2008
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is a story about Sam that, incidentally, lets us see a side of Jason we suspect but don't normally get to see, rather than a story about Sam that masquerades as a story about Jason or shows us a side of him that has no basis in canon. Tiny hint of possible romance if I look for it, but not overwhelming (with the happy possibility for more when it's appropriate). It also shows the people Jason chooses to hang out with.

I like stories like this.

She holds her own in this story and stories that mention her only slightly. I like her as a person and she's interesting to read about.

Summary: The title says it all.
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Chief Anderson, Jason, Keyop, Mark, Princess
Genre: Humor/Comedy
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Cross-Over
Word count: 1263 - Read Count: 2412 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 08/06/2008 - Published: 08/04/2008
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 09/17/2008 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Son and husband have read it too. Husband is disappointed it didn't continue, and thinks Jason should have started looking for enemy involvement and brought in others of the team -- that would have given him more to read. Son(10) thought it was funny.

Author's Response:

Hi Cricket.

I've been thinking about writing more, but haven't figured it out yet.

Summary: The pressures of war get to one BotP member.
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Keyop, Princess
Genre: Angst, Character Study
Story Warnings: Mild Violence
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Mostly Canon
Challenges: The Goat's Tail Challenge
Word count: 423 - Read Count: 1916 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 09/25/2008 - Published: 09/25/2008
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 06/04/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Beautiful little scene. Only one quibble: You described him as a young man, and it's early in the war. I thought probably Jason, maybe Mark or Tiny. Keyop would have been a pre-teen, not young man.

Great work with the involuntary flashback, and Princess immediately understanding.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Cricket.  I made the change.  You know, when I first started this one, I thought it was about Jason.  It wasn't until later that I realized who I was writing about.

- One Night at Jill's by jublke - Rated: Everyone - - starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 5]
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Summary: Why should Mark and Jason get all the girls?
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Mark, Original Character, Other Canon Character, Tiny Harper
Genre: Romance
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Mostly Canon
Word count: 1204 - Read Count: 1982 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 10/09/2008 - Published: 10/09/2008
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 06/04/2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice detail with the spelling. It has me wondering why Tiny did it. At first I thought she wasn't good at reading (since it's a new language for her), then I thought he did it purposefully, to make her comfortable -- but would he know it would, rather than seem to be making fun of her? Then I realized that Tiny may not have come up through the regular air force, with the implants and all. I'd like to seem more of this couple. I also want to know more of her background.

Author's Response: In the original, I had the misspelled word crossed out, but Gatchfanfic doesn't seem to like words with X's through them.  This piece was heavily influenced by Lori McDonald's Never Give Up, a piece where Ryu puzzles something out in appalling spelling (the X's are messed up in that story, too, making it hard to read, but I read it for the first time on a different site).  I figured Tiny to be more learned than that, but maybe he still struggles with writing.  Thanks for the review!  I actually have a second piece outlined for this arc - maybe I should dust it off.  :)

- Just A Driver by cathrl - Rated: 8+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 8]
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Summary: Jason's sick and tired of people who think that driving's easy. Mark joining them is pretty much the last straw. So, can he find a way to demonstrate his skill and get his own back on the man who took his command, all at the same time?
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Mark
Genre: General
Story Warnings: Mild Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Alternate Universe, Mostly Canon
Word count: 9516 - Read Count: 2030 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 11/22/2008 - Published: 11/22/2008
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Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I've been jumping around the timeline in your series this weekend. I read Black Belt just before this one. A bit jarring read back-to-back, but believable. It shows how difficult it was for them to become a team. They had smooth parts and rough parts. Some parts of their relationship were smoother than others.

Had to laugh a bit in a later story, not sure which one, where Jason calmly says he's just a driver and is okay with what others will assume.

- Extraction II by cathrl - Rated: Everyone - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
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Summary: So where did Mark learn his disguise and acting skills? A followup to Extraction - read that one first :)
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: None
Genre: General
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Canon
Word count: 2308 - Read Count: 2356 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 01/02/2009 - Published: 01/02/2009
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Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A fun read. Poor team. Smart Mark.

- Testimony II by Katharine - Rated: 18+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 5]
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Summary: An impulsive battlefield decision creates the potential for grave repurcussions.
Categories: Gatchaman, Battle of the Planets
Series: The Disturbediverse
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Jinpei, Joe Asakura, Keyop, Original Character
Genre: Character Study, Drama
Story Warnings: Graphic Violence, Mature Content, Strong Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Alternate Universe
Word count: 2849 - Read Count: 2273 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 08/20/2009 - Published: 08/20/2009
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/04/2009 Title: Chapter 1: Testimony II

Awesome story.

Her seeing the girl as a girl first, not a killer, and approving Key's mercy, reminded me of what happens to Kelley.

I like her explanation to Jun. The core truth of why he did what he did, and the only part that matters to Kelley.

The Devil Star's reaction confirms that Key was right. Nice closure, and nice hook to the sequel, should it present itself for writing.

- Resurrection by cathrl - Rated: 13+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 23]
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Summary:

Mark's back behind his desk, Don's in a chemistry lab, Jason's commanding G-Force, Rick's the Phoenix co-pilot.

And not one of them is happy about it.


Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 14 - Table of Contents
Characters: Chief Anderson, Don Wade, Jason, Keyop, Mark, Original Character, Princess, Tiny Harper
Genre: Action/Adventure, Drama, Epic, General
Story Warnings: Mild Adult Situations, Mild Language
Timeframe: Sequel
Universe: Tenuously Canon
Word count: 50773 - Read Count: 23366 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 12/17/2010 - Published: 12/03/2010
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What a wonderful way to spend a weekend! This story and all the rest I hadn't read. Great use of the "What's the worst thing that can happen?" plot generator.

World torn apart, then back together enough to make me happy, but not so seamless as to be unrealistic.

Don had a big change, once he got his implants back. Will we see more of him?

Not happy that Sam won't get a happily-ever-after with Jason for a while, but that can wait. Same with Mark and Princess.

Your OCs pass the "if they were OCs in an original story" test. So do your characters -- you don't assume we'll love them just because we loved them in canon.

Good mixing of the threads, and you have many. Every one of your characters has several things going on and either struggles to remember that sometimes the people around them are mad for other reasons, or has to deal with people not remembering (or even knowing) that.

Looking forward to learning what they'll do about Spectra's latest plans. Even more looking forward to learning what the teams do about them.

- Black belt by cathrl - Rated: 8+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 7]
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Summary:

When you have a cover identity to maintain, sometimes just being really, really good at what you do isn't enough. Sometimes you still need the piece of paper to prove it.

Sometimes you need a piece of paper you really should have got round to acquiring several years ago.


Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Jason, Mark
Genre: General
Story Warnings: Mild Language
Timeframe: Mid-Series
Universe: Tenuously Canon
Word count: 9260 - Read Count: 2249 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 03/05/2011 - Published: 03/05/2011
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Absolutely will not let the karate people in the family read this. Husband's stuck in the long, slow, middle kyus, terrified that if he works too hard Sensei will insist he go all the way to black.

20 night shifts for a chance to spar with the Eagle. LOL.

I like the ref saying at the end that he let the sparring be harder than usual. He wanted the other fighters to have a good turn, but he also knows both the judges and the fighters are evaluating him. He wants a reputation for fairness and knowing what's appropriate for each level, not for making the tests too hard.

More evidence that your minor characters are still people.

Author's Response:

(grins) I suspect that what will happen if a karate person reads this will be that they'll be mentally making a list of Things Our School Does Not Do Like That :) My eleven year old beta caught one... it hadn't occurred to me that you'd give pass, merit, distinction for every belt except black, which is pass/fail only...

Yup, they all know why Mark's there and how good he really is, so the ref's between a rock and a hard place as far as both making it a fair test and making it a decent bout goes. Hence it not being Jason reffing. No whispers of Mark getting special treatment from his second if the balance is a bit off either way.

Many thanks for reviewing - much appreciated.

Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 03/13/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Why bother making a list of differences? We know there will be some, even between dojos of the same style. I smiled knowingly and comradely (is that a word?) at the familiar bits and thought about the bits that were different.

Laughed when Jason pointed out that the 2-day endurance trial wasn't required in this case.

- Regulations by cathrl - Rated: 8+ - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 14]
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Summary:

Mark's a stickler for the rules. He knows they're there for a reason, and he won't break them for his own gain, no matter how badly he'd like to.

But every rule has a loophole somewhere.


Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: Cath's Battle AU
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: Mark, Princess
Genre: Romance
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Sequel
Universe: Mostly Canon
Word count: 1440 - Read Count: 2426 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 03/22/2011 - Published: 03/22/2011
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 03/22/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice how Jason's plan (missile!) is used, even though Mark is back in command.

Nice characterizations, one line each, what they think about next and how they say it. Who realizes what he's planning.

Yes, saccharine. Nice, syrupy, drippy, fuzyy-feeling, well-played saccharine.

Clearly the end of the arc, too. You brought us up, over and now down. Closure. You could start a new arc, but this is the end of the current one.

Author's Response:

Well, it's the end of this little arc. I'd like to think I have a whole load of little arcs all starting and ending in different places, and I still have a few things not tied up...

I've put all the main pieces back where I found them, though. So yes, closure for that.

Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 03/23/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, there is a certain mechanic, but she's still a bit young. Growing in the right direction, but not there yet. (Or maybe I should have read her stories in the right order.) I'll wait patiently.

- Dual Citizenship by jublke - Rated: Everyone - - starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 8]
Table of Contents
Summary: In 2009, I entered an essay contest with the theme "invisible writing."  This was my entry about writing BotP fanfiction. 
Categories: Battle of the Planets
Series: None
Chapters: 1 - Table of Contents
Characters: None
Genre: Essay
Story Warnings: None
Timeframe: Other
Universe: None
Word count: 573 - Read Count: 1867 - Completed: Yes
Updated: 03/31/2011 - Published: 03/31/2011
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Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 04/01/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That sounds similar to my experiences. There's also the freedom of knowing that it cannot be submitted for publication. Having made that decision up front, we have more freedom.

Author's Response:

Cricket, you are so right!  I was just talking to my 5-year-old about that.  He figured I liked writing fanfiction because I made a lot of money at it!  I told him that when you write fanfiction, it's a labor of love.  You do it for the love of writing, the love of the characters, and the love of the fans.  And, yes, we have a lot of leeway in what we write.  At least until our beta readers put a stop to it.  ;)

Reviewer: Cricket Signed
Date: 04/01/2011 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Assuming we want the beta readers to stop it. I have one scene that I know ruins the pacing, but haven't the heart to change it. (Maybe I'll come up with a way that works. We'll see.)

Author's Response: Weren't you the one who pointed out that my "uppercut" in Uppercut is really a different kind of punch?  Part of me wants to go back & edit that scene and part of me thinks I should leave it as is - warts and all - so I can remember how much I've grown as a writer.  You are right, though, ultimately we are all responsible for our own work.  But that's part of the fun, isn't it?  :)