Reviews For Engine No. 9
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Reviewer: Chris White Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/30/2012 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

Poor Jason. :) At least he's alive to be laughed at!

I like that they didn't have the traditional battlefield conversion. There they thought they were ending everything and taking their enemy down with them, and all they did was get themselves arrested.

I find that in a lot of your pieces, I end up a little confused about who's doing what. This one is written smoothly, so I'm a little hard-pressed to think of a specific spot to point out. Perhaps names or more specific identifiers need to appear more? Or, it's possible it's just me. :)



Author's Response: Glad it was enjoyable. Not the smartest thing Jason's ever done by any means... ;)  No, no, if you've noticed a trend, then it's a trend -- I shall attend to that forthwith.   Thank you for that. 

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