Date: 06/18/2007 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
This has more stuff in it that I can even cover. You did a thorough job of covering just about every Christmas cliche out there. I do have my favorite moments: X irradiating the room after his O. Henry moment with Katse; "The voice was deep and threatening at first, but suddenly the shade realized it couldn't possibly make its voice as deep and threatening as Joe's got just saying 'hello' and 'good morning,' so it dropped the pretense." Joe strangling the goon shade. Joe getting his wish to determine who lives and who dies. The ending with the turkey mech fell a little flat. I don't know why--structurally, there's nothing wrong with it. It didn't have the zing and momentum of the earlier paragraphs. Still, I love this parody!