Reviews For Tough to Swallow
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Reviewer: Chris White Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/06/2012 10:33 PM Title: Epilogue

Absolutely loved this. Keyop deserved some love and fair treatment, glad to see him getting it. :) Though not from the scientists and Zark!

Author's Response: Well Zark doesn't give *anyone* fair treatment... except himself!

Reviewer: Candi Gomez Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08/12/2008 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

I agree with Springie on most of this! LOL!

But...once it was established that Keyop was a foul-thinking, wanna-be-foulmouthed kid, did you have to keep using so many cuss-words? The point was established, and implying that Keyop kept cussing ever three minutes -and allowing the reader to use their imagination- could well have worked just as well. If you want, of course.

Author's Response:

You make a good point, but OTOH, I couldn't think of a good way to carefully phase it out. If he just stopped, then technically there wouldn't be any need for the breeps and broops, right? It just didn't seem right, after I went to some trouble to establish the fact that he did cuss like a sailor, to suddenly take it out.

Reviewer: Springie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/17/2007 7:34 PM Title: Chapter 1

GAH! Woman, you are amazing! This fic was so much fun to read...I loved hearing Keyop's *real* thoughts behind the bleeps and burbles! Hillarious!

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