Date: 06/04/2012 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
"Using a tone normally reserved for silencing incompetent junior officers." I don't remember the series showing her needing that tone, but I'm sure it happened off camera, and the junior officer would remember.
Looks like the wisps didn't do their homework. Telling Keyop that he is safe, when the team is missing? Stupid!
Little Big Planet owes you royalties. Your version is better. Do you think someone else could take my shift there for a few nights?
Nice work with the two different POVs for the previous victim.
Any chance of more in this series? It's got potential.
Author's Response: I've thought about doing a follow-up, but I haven't quite got a workable plot yet. We'll see ...
Date: 02/04/2010 6:21 PM Title: Chapter 1
I actually really liked this story, it was well thought out and entertaining. I love stories where Jason plays the paramedic, it brings out a side of him we don't always see. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks, mandy1! I appreciate you stopping by and leaving a comment. You know, I tend to forget that Jason has paramedic training. I'm assuming everyone on the team would have at least some training, but we don't see that very often (especially in BotP, where no one ever gets hurt or dies!).
Date: 03/22/2008 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Julie, I really enjoyed this unique perspective on the "Theta Region". I felt badly for poor Keyop, and I was intrigued by this whole dreamlike state he was in. Congrats!
Author's Response: Thanks, Springie. :) This was a hard challenge for me, but I really enjoyed writing it. Maybe someday I'll go back to the Theta Region. I'd like to explore what's really going on in those dreams that Chief Anderson is having ...
[Report This]Date: 03/04/2008 10:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Sounds like you did a bit of research on this, and it really shows. I did not guess that you were the one who wrote this fanfic, as it is different from the others of yours that I have read. Big congrats on that! :)
I agree, the title was the right title for this fanfic, and goes in quite nicely with the entire theme. At first I thought the "Theta Region" was actually about a specific area of space, but as I read, then it dawned on me that this was concerning the mental side of biology.
Most wouldn't have chosen Keyop as the person for the center of this story, but I'm glad you did. The other members of G-Force would have had drastically different responses to the encounter, and it was nice to see it with the still-childlike responses of Keyop.
Even with Keyop being the center, it was nice to see the other characters staying in character and making appearances at the right time. Jason was used nicely as the medic, a skill of his that I admit I sometimes forget he has (and make adequate use of in fanfic). Kuddos!
The only thing I think that could make this better is more on Zoltar's presence in all this. And does the Spirit also have a presence? Or perhaps the Spirit THROUGH Zoltar? Or maybe I'm asking for too much in a short story. ;) But I am intrigued at what specific effects Zoltar could have through this realm.
Thanks so much for participating in the Challenge. You did a great job!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Julieann, I'm so glad you liked this. :) Your review means a lot to me because I know that you read and write a lot of science fiction. And I'm also glad to give something back to you, because I sure appreciate all of your work in keeping this website up and running!
You've made a great point about Zoltar and the Great Spirit. I wish I would have thought about that before I finished this piece. If I ever go back to the Theta Region (because I love the idea of plaguing Anderson with nightmares about wisps!), I will have to explore this more. I would think the Spirit would operate in the wisp world ... maybe even as a super-wisp or an anti-wisp. Hmm. You've got me thinking now! LOL. Thanks again for the review. Julie K.
Date: 03/03/2008 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
I loved what you did with my idea... It's fun to see what somebody else does with something that comes out of my warped mind :)
I've had this idea for a long time, but I never did anything with it. I came from a book I read almost 25 years ago, where a boy wakes up and finds everybody gone. My problem with it was that it was never resolved where everybody went. So it kept bugging me.
I figured that it would be some sort of dream, or some other sort of mind trick to whoever you chose. I liked the way you switched back and forth between the aliens, Keyop and the rest of the team, explaining the things that were happening simultaneously. It totally fit together.
I may actually write down my own idea for this story some day (which is, in fact, an angst-ridden character study :), but not soon. I have some catching up to do with reading everything that's been appearing on this site.
And I totally guessed right for this story :)
Petra
Author's Response: Thanks, Petra. :) I'm so glad you liked it. This challenge really stretched me as a writer and I enjoyed the process. I look forward to seeing your story someday. Julie K.