[Report This]Date: 08/26/2012 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this piece. I thought Ken, Jun and even Joe's behavior was very believable - even if painful to read. After all, Jun is young and inexperienced with real life - the pregnancy had to be overwhelming for her. Looking forward to reading Part 2. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. It took a bit of thought writing it. I even hesitiated to write it, took months before I took the plunge. I wanted to be real with her, rather than Jun knowing it all at 16yrs old, even smart people make mistakes. I've based a lot of it off real stories I know about birth/biological parents. Made enough changes of course for the universe, characters, and story content.
Date: 07/29/2012 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, there's a ton of stories on here where the Swan is a bit of a Mary Sue. You made her feel very human. :)
[Report This]Date: 08/07/2008 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
This story is amazing. I think of Jun as an intelligent, logical woman, but you've painted a believable picture of how she could become emotionally stressed and unintentionally make bad choices. I am both empathizing with her and berating her as I read this fic. It's wonderful, and you've sucked me right into it!
Author's Response: Thanks TJ!!
Date: 07/04/2008 4:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, a nice angsty ending! You've definitely got me anticipating the second part. Surely Ken will learn, sooner or later, about Dyami and I can't wait to see what happens. then.
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Date: 07/04/2008 5:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great piece. I could really feel Jun's conflict coming out as it progressed. Can't wait to see the next two parts of the trilogy.
Author's Response: Thank you, they are in progress, and when I start posting a story I set a deadline to get it done, so I won't leave you hanging.
[Report This]Date: 06/30/2008 8:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love this storyline, and have been following it from the beginning. I know I should have reviewed long again, but ...I am always lazy with reviews. Anyway, it's very good ...very interesting, and I am more than a little curious to how Ken is going to take his new arrival. Poor Jun having to go through it alone ...I don't know why she won't risk it, and just admit what is going on with herself.
Anyway, wonderful story.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Those very questions get answered along the way, some in the second part of the story. ;)
Date: 06/06/2008 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
A promising beginning -Jun and Ken are so happy, so in love, so clearly something is about to go wrong. I look forward to finding out what!
Author's Response: More will be posted soon...you won't have to wait for long, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.