Date: 06/04/2012 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful little scene. Only one quibble: You described him as a young man, and it's early in the war. I thought probably Jason, maybe Mark or Tiny. Keyop would have been a pre-teen, not young man.
Great work with the involuntary flashback, and Princess immediately understanding.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Cricket. I made the change. You know, when I first started this one, I thought it was about Jason. It wasn't until later that I realized who I was writing about.