Reviews For One Night at Jill's
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Reviewer: Dei Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12/08/2012 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

I don't know how I missed this one.  It's short and sweet and reads quite plausibly. :)

I dunno... my spelling has gone to pot of late, now freed from the demands of correctness -- lack of practice will do that for you.

Nice one.  

Reviewer: Cricket Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/04/2012 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1

Nice detail with the spelling. It has me wondering why Tiny did it. At first I thought she wasn't good at reading (since it's a new language for her), then I thought he did it purposefully, to make her comfortable -- but would he know it would, rather than seem to be making fun of her? Then I realized that Tiny may not have come up through the regular air force, with the implants and all. I'd like to seem more of this couple. I also want to know more of her background.

Author's Response: In the original, I had the misspelled word crossed out, but Gatchfanfic doesn't seem to like words with X's through them.  This piece was heavily influenced by Lori McDonald's Never Give Up, a piece where Ryu puzzles something out in appalling spelling (the X's are messed up in that story, too, making it hard to read, but I read it for the first time on a different site).  I figured Tiny to be more learned than that, but maybe he still struggles with writing.  Thanks for the review!  I actually have a second piece outlined for this arc - maybe I should dust it off.  :)

Reviewer: cyscoe Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/10/2008 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is so sweet.  I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks, cyscoe.  I'm glad you liked it.  I'll have to give it some thought ...  :)

Reviewer: Nephedra Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/09/2008 7:41 PM Title: Chapter 1

This was great! I love seeing these stories about Tiny. You have me curious about the girl. Where is she from? How many times has she relocated and why? Hmmm....are there more stories about her? :D Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks for your kind words, Nephedra.  I'll have to think about bringing her back.  I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Reviewer: Becky Rock Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/09/2008 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

I can't believe I couldn't remember this! I'm sorry, Julie! It's nice to see Tiny in the forefront. Great story!

Author's Response: Thanks, Becky.  But since I couldn't remember that you beta-read it for me, I think we're even!  :-)

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