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Reviewer: cathrl Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: 05/29/2009 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 2-Five Birds Gather Part 2

Not for me, I'm afraid. This could use a _lot_ more proofreading (spelling Phoenix wrong in the title isn't a good start) and these unpleasant people simply aren't the characters I recognise. Ken's reaction to being told he made a mistake is to punch the flight instructor? Even more bizarre; the flight instructor is casually rude to his student about his dead father? Joe goes out of his way to prolong a fight for several hours? Why aren't all those bikers on the floor inside thirty seconds?

What I'm seeing here is someone self-inserting themselves being casually unpleasant to all around them, defeating their enemies and gloating about it, and being selected as if it's a positive character trait. It isn't. The KNT are not these nasty people, and nobody would select these unpleasant brats for anything. I really recommend you consider what sort of people would end up in the sort of close team we see in the show, and what positive traits you think you are illustrating here which would cause anyone to select these kids for anything at all. I'm not seeing any.


Reviewer: whitewolf Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/23/2009 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 2-Five Birds Gather Part 2

Hi, .......

so far so good!..I like the way you are presenting an alternative origins for the team....can't wait for the next instalments to this wonderful(may be long?) story....keep up the good work.......


Author's Response: I didn't think the first volumes would turn out so well.Let alone be posted. I'll be sure to bring updates as soon as I can.

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